Knowledge and Understanding: 4
I did not go into the political atmosphere around the time when the novel was published or any of its literary influences. I did point out certain phrases and words to talk about specifically in how they represented the theme. I did point out what scene the excerpt was in, but did not cover many major events that already occurred.
Understanding and Use and effects of literary features: 3
I had difficulty discussing how certain elements effected Offred's narration, such as the different tenses she used, and the effect on overall mood for the reader or reader's understanding.
Organization: 2
I did not clearly differentiate between when I was talking about the eyes/eye line as a symbolism and red as symbolism. I also had difficulty clearly linking each example to the overall theme I was aiming towards which was gender rolls. I also did not summarize each point or conclude effectively in relating how each point connects back to the overall theme.
Language: 3
I tried to use literary specific words, but I fell short of using more than what was required to name the devices I was going to analyze. I also start, stop, and restart several sentences in my commentary.
Julie:
ReplyDeleteI agree with your scoring and feedback. Some suggestions:
You need a purpose statement- the purpose of this passage is to convey a theme of _________, which the author achieves through________, _______, and _________- this is helpful for your organization as well. However, I do think you consider the reader most of the time.
With your purpose statement, keep linking back to it with each "section" or feature you look at.
Additionally, remember that summarizing or paraphrasing is not analyzing (so why that pronoun instead of another?)- make sure you are always thinking about the how, but also the WHY?
You use textual evidence well, but see previous note.
Some of your explaination might be a bit too "book-club" discussion- keep it tight and focused
Keep terms, devices, features simple...point of view, tone, setting, conflict, etc.
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